Pieces:
ONE.
- I don't know if the eye works. Can you even see it?
- I was shooting for a lot of movement in the body. Did that work out?
TWO.
- The diagonal line that follows along the wing and yellow bothers me.
- Is they eye alright?
- Can you even tell it's holding a snake, does it even matter?
I like the snake thing, even though you can't really tell. It kind of doubles up as a branch. That line doesn't bother me as much as it does you.
ReplyDeleteOn your first bird the eye does work, at least from this close I can tell it's an eye. And I think birds' features can be subtle from far away, so I would say you did a good job on the face. Also, I do feel a lot of movement in your first piece, although I think if you extended the wing closest to the white blob in the corner, it made connect to that chaos a bit more (for me a lot of the movement emanates from the corner). But I also see the movement in the tail feathers and lines coming from the top of the page. I think you accomplished what you wanted to for the most part. It's beautiful. On your second piece I agree with Andrew on the snake, I thought it was ribbon but it's wonderful. I also love the texture in the wings. I would define the face a bit more, but that's just me. Especially the right eye. Great work!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I really like the texture in both of these and how you add light colors and lines over the dark. For the first peice, I cannot see the eye very well, but I think I like it better that way. And I see the most movement in the feathers of it's body but it kinda stop at the neck. In your second peice, the owl is separtated from the background really well, but is still feels grounded. I like the yellow and think it was a good choice in color when next to the blue because the yellow is very warm and the blue is a little colder. Maybe the eye feels weird because the beak and the eyes are ligned up a different way from how the body of the own is pointed. It makes the bird have a sense of distortion, but that seems to be common in some other peices. I like this feature because it looks purposeful and gives it character.
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I really like these! i love the abstract backgrounds, they make the birds really pop. I can see the eye, but maybe some white would make it be more visible? The top one looks really nice, but it seems like the head doesn't really fit on the neck because of the green on the head and then the blue like, it seems almost like its suddenly getting smaller, so maybe add a small amount of green or something to connect them...
ReplyDeletethe one on the bottom is really nice too and has a ton of movement. I guessed that it was a snake and i think it would work as a branch too. the lines of it are great and show a ton of movement. I think the line on the wing takes away some of the softness of the rest of the piece, but i kind of like it, maybe just make it a little lighter color or something so it isn't the first thing you see.
I really love both of these though and I can't wait to see the rest!
Cara, I don't think I've ever told you this but I am in love with your work. I love it so much. There is so much movement and life in the birds. Without being realistic you have captured the birds in a way even more stunning. I can't wait to see all the pieces together at the end of April!
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